Таково моё сочинение,но в нём много ошибок,проверьте пожалуйста и исправьте ошибки: It...

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Таково моё сочинение,но в нём много ошибок,проверьте пожалуйста и исправьте ошибки:
It was raining when I, my sister, my father and his friend went on a fishing trip. The day was rainy, cloudy, just for catching fish.
When we arrived at the lake, we saw people who had apparently come to fish too. We built a fire, got warm, pumped up the boat and went fishing with fishing rods. We fished for 8 hours. We talked all the time. We caught 10 pikes and 5 perches.
This was my first long night fishing. Everything was fantastic. At two o'clock in the morning we came back,had a meal and went to bed.After detting up at five in the morning, WE had breakfast and then went fishing, admiring the sunrise. We only came back home at five o'clock in the evening.
I will never forget this fishing. Everything was just great. I had a good fun and rest.

оно немного не подходит к плану которое дано:1)вступление
2)когда,где случилась история,кто участвовал
3)основная часть-обзацы-2,3-события(последовательно и кульминационный момент
4)что произошло в конце,как себя чувствовали
(время:past simple?past continious)

Answer 1

It was raining when I, my sister, my father and his friend went on a fishing trip. The day was rainy, cloudy, just right for catching fish.
When we arrived to the lake, we saw people who had apparently come to fish too. We built a fire, got warm, pumped up the boat and went fishing taking our fishing rods. We had been fishing for 8 hours. We were talking all the time. We caught 10 pike and 5 perch.
This was my first long night fishing. Everything was fantastic. At two o'clock in the morning we came back, had a meal and went to bed. After getting up at five in the morning, we had breakfast and then went fishing, admiring the sunrise. We only came back home at five o'clock in the evening.
I will never forget this fishing. Everything was just great. I had a good fun and rest.