I remember my first
teacher very well. Her name was elena a. She and we (мы имеется в виду ученики? предлагаю убрать She and оставить просто We met..) met on the first day of school year on a warm autumn day. She was an incredibly warm personality. She was middle-aged of medium (что значит средних лет середины? можно убрать of medium). She was well-build, and had wrinkled pale-skin with rosy cheeks.She usually wore brown curly hair in heatly bun (что значит здоровая булочка? She usually made a bagel with her brown curly hair, that accented her round face) which highlights her round
face.her smile whole face lights up. She wore light makeup and casual
clothes. (нужно определиться, в каком времени вы пишите, где-то настоящее, где-то прошлое, я все заменила на прошедшее время)
She was a kind woman and paid much attention to all of us. She taught us how to read and write. She told us many interesting things about everything and she instructed us how to work (работать над чем? она не могла вас учить работать в принципе).
She was a very good professional. She loved children, that is very important in teacher's job. I will always remember e.a. I have only warm memories of those
years.