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Проверьте эссе, пожалуйста! Вот тема "in any occupation discipline is more importantthan talent"
Talent is
great, but discipline could be a bit boring. Which of those kinds a person
should have to become successful?



In my
opinion, talent is just nothing without discipline. Firstly, people used to
think that talent is the something in humans’ genes which can provide a
personal jet, diamonds, luxurious cars, and big houses. This is a lie because
only a person can earn all this stuff using a talent. Besides, talent could
become rotten without developing; only permanent trainings and exacting lessons
are able to make talent to work. Additionally, discipline could give a
wide-range of skills which are necessary in a life, while talent does not teach
anything.



On the
other hand, millions of people are convinced that learning discipline is just a
waste of time, efforts, and money. They believe that success depends on talent.
Also, they try to substantiate their opinion giving examples of the famous
artists.



I cannot
agree with these people, how could Beethoven compose his music without skills
in reading and writing notes? How could Van Gogh paint his paintings without
being aware of technique? Of course there are geniuses exists but an average
person is obliged to learn a lot not relying on talent.



In
conclusion, people used to say “no sweet without sweat” and this is totally
right. A person cannot be successful if he or she is none disciplined.


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 firstly ни к чему,просто people used to think,или initially people thought,necessary in life
of course there are geniuses или of course geniuses exist,not disciplined 

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