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Nowadays we have a lot of ways to begin our career after finishing the education. And one of this is to live and work abroad.
In me opinion it is a really good opportunity, because I think that in other countries I can earn more money,get a better life,get more possibilities to improve my skills. In my dreams I will move abroad after finishing my education, because in my view our countryis not developing. I think that it is much better to live and work abroad,because in other country I will meet new people, learn their culture, habbits and thereby I will develop myself.
However other people think differently. They probably think that move abroad is a bad idea, because people should live and work in country, where they was born. Also they think that in each person must be a sense of patriotism.
But I think that despite of life abroad,person also can have a sense of patriotism,,e.g. love our culture,love our government,love our culture,cuisine,but live in other country because of better conditions. What's more person can live and work in other country some time and then come back to may be improve our life and work,telling others about his life abroad.
All in all,I can say that n my opinion life and work abroad is a good chance to develop both yourself and your country.

Answer 1

Nowadays there are a lot of ways to start your career after finishing the education. And one of these is to live and work abroad.
In me opinion it is a really good opportunity, because I think working in another countries I will be able to make more money, get a better life, find more possibilities to improve my skills. In my dreams I will move abroad after finishing school, because from my point of view our country is not developing. I believe that it is much better to live and work abroad, because in foreign country I will meet new people, learn their culture, habbits and thereby I will develop myself as a person.
However other people think differently. They probably believe that moving abroad is a bad idea, because people should live and work in country, where they were born. Also they think that every person must have patriotic attachments to their countries.

But I guess even if you live abroad, you can stay patriotic. You can love your native culture, cuisine, but live in another country because of better conditions.

Another benefit from moving abord is that if someone lived and worked in another country for some time, they could come back and try to improve our life and work, telling others about thier experience.

The bottom line is that from my prospective living and working abroad is a good chance to develop both yourself and your country.

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Answer 2

Nowadays we have a lot of ways to begin our career after finishing the education. And one of this is to live and work abroad.
In my opinion it is a really good opportunity, because I think that in other countries I can earn more money,get a better life,get more possibilities to improve my skills. In my dreams I will go abroad after finishing my university, because in my view our country is not developing. I think that it is much better to live and work abroad,because in other country I will meet new people, learn their culture, habbits and I will develop myself.
However other people think differently. They probably think that going abroad is a bad idea, because people should live and work in country, where they were born. Also they think that  each person must  be a patriot of his motherland.
But I think  despite of life abroad,person also can be a patriot ,,e.g. love our culture,love our government,love our culture,cuisine,but live in other country because of better conditions. What's more person can live and work in other country some time and then come back to may be improve our life and work,telling others about his life abroad.
 In my opinion life abroad is a good chance to develop both yourself and your country.

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