Проверте ошибки Every year I went to the camps, now I'm ready to try myself as a leader....

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Проверте ошибки Every year I went to the camps, now I'm ready to try myself as a leader. Madly I love children. Took part in the education of a cousin and two nephews.I'm writing this letter to get a job in your camp. I already practiced pedagogical practice (I worked at school 30). In the summer of 2015 I worked as an animator from McDonald's company. assistant counselor in a charity camp.
There are ready plans for various camp activities.
Personal qualities:
Discipline, responsibility, stress-resistance, activity, diligence, creative thinking, good learning ability, positivity. There are no bad habits.
Enthusiasm:
I am professionally engaged in dances for more than 10 years, a winner and a participant in city, all-Ukrainian and international competitions. I take a great interest in psychology. I took part in a theatrical circle. I take an interest in playing the guitar. Besides, tourism and orienteering are my strong sides. I study languages.Education:
Currently I study at the Sumy State Pedagogical University named after AS Makarenko in the second year of the Faculty of Foreign Languages.


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! every year I GO to the different camps (раз уж существительное во мн. числе, лучше поставить прилагательное)
! i lovе children madly (наречие на последнее место)
! I've had a role in educatING...
! I HAVE already practiced...
! ...Mc'Donalds company and as assistant counselor... (лучше совместить)
! ready замените на prepared
! ...I HAVE BEEN professionally engaged in dancING
! ...I HAVE a great...
! ...I also used to take part in a theatrical... (лучше заменить на этот оборот)
! I HAVE an interest in playing...
! I LEARN languages (не study)

вроде все недочеты исправлены.

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