Проверьте пожалуйста сочинение. I like many other people have a computer, phone and I can...

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Проверьте пожалуйста сочинение.
I like many other people have a computer, phone and I can not imagine my life without it. In fact the 21st century is a century og hight technologies. Nowadays people can hardly imagine their life without communication technologies. It is impossible to go for a walk without a phone because we use it all time. I spend my free time using my computer and surf in the internet. The computer has made my life easier and help me with lessons. But when we use computer and telephone too much we become dependent on them. So the computer has become important part of our life and changed our it. But most of all help us and change our life inernet.

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спасибо, мне помогла

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Answer 1

Не, surf, а surfing the Internet, без in
the computer...helps me with my homework (так лучше)))
Вместо so я б поставила All in all или Anyway
если в последнем предложении речь об Интернете, то лучше сказать The Internet most than anything else helps us and changes our life