Честно сказать, не мастер я по оценке эссе к ЕГЭ. Вот у меня ученица написала сегодня --по мне так весьма хорошо.
Посмотрите ---может какие замечания-недочеты
Хотя с другой стороны -слова типа dyes, irreversible, supplements - явно со словаря взяты.Это нормально и надо поощрять?
Или наоборот --говорить, что на ЕГЭ никаких словарей не будет.
Или и то и другое говорить ? :)
Nowadays many people prefer eating in fast food restaurants. They say that it’s very comfortable and helps them to save much time. At the same time other people argue that it’s not healthy and does a lot of harm to the human organism.
As far as I am concerned I completely agree with the last viewpoint. To my mind people should tend to eat it as less as possible because it’s very unhealthy. Firstly, it contains a lot of food supplements such as preservatives, dyes, aromatizers. They damage people’s health because they cannot be assimilated in their digestive system. Many scientists claim that they can cause irreversible changes in people’s organism if they eat fast food regularly.
Secondly, it’s widely known that fast food causes obesity. As its products don’t have any vitamins and minerals people cannot fully satisfy their hunger by eating them. That’s why a few hours after having a meal they will have to eat again. As a result a people gain a lot of weight. In addition, these products are made of substances which cause overweight too such as sugar, fat, white flour, etc.
On the contrary, many people especially those who are too busy with their work say that they like eating fast food because they don’t have time to cook themselves. It’s true that it’s much faster and easier. But people should not sacrifice their health to work this way because if a person is unhealthy he wouldn’t be able to work productively as he would always feel tired and inert.
In conclusion, I think that people should cut down on fast food because it is not a good way to save time and is very unhealthy.