Проверьте ** ошибки, и если есть исправьте пожалуйста) Hello, Irina, will you be in my...

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Hello, Irina, will you be in my party?
Hello, after which the party?
In honor of my birthday.
Oh, my God, I forgot, sorry, I’ll be of course! And who is invited else?
Lily, Alina, Anna – you know them, and some cheerful guys!
О, it‘ll be cool! What to bring with me?
Yes, please, take some bottles of Cola and a few snacks.
Ok, what I can, so I bring. When I can come?
The start begins by seven o’clock. I'll be waiting.
ОК.

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У вас вопросы не верно составлены, я их исправил. А еще запятые, которые указываются при обращении в русском языке, никак не должны присутствовать в английском. Это разные языки, не стоит мешать правила.

Answer 1

Hello, Irina. Are you will come to my party?
Why would you choose to have a party
In honor of my birthday. 
Oh, my God, I forgot, sorry, I’ll be of course! And who is invited else? 
Lily, Alina and Anna – you know them, and some cheerful girls! 
О, it‘ll be cool! What to bring with me? 
Yes, please take some bottles of Cola and a few snacks. 
Ok, what I can, so I bring. When I can come? 
The start begins by seven o’clock. I'll be waiting. 
ОК.

Answer 2

Hello, Irina, will you come to my party? 
Hello, What party? 
my birthday party. 
Oh, my God, I have forgotten, sorry. of course I’ll come ! And who is invited else? 
Lily, Alina, Anna – you know them, and several cute guys! 
О, it‘s cool! What should I bring with me? 
Please, take some Cola and a few snacks. 
Ok, I'll bring, what I can. What time should I come? 
The party will begin at seven o’clock. I'll be waiting.